I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 9 and in 2021 I will be a year 10. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Hi Jayden here at Awahono School. I like how you included descriptive words, when you were describing the Smaug's eye. Maybe next time you could use sentences to describe the Smaug's eye. If you changed something in this piece of writing what would it be and why? Click on the link below to see my blog
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Hi Jayden here at Awahono School. I like how you included descriptive words, when you were describing the Smaug's eye. Maybe next time you could use sentences to describe the Smaug's eye. If you changed something in this piece of writing what would it be and why? Click on the link below to see my blog
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